After taking on board the feedback that I received for my rough draft, I tried my best to incorporate it into my second draft, in order to make an overall better product. I think that the main criticisms that I tried to take on board was the idea that the shots were all too long and it was not filmed from enough angles. Also, the opening credits were not in fitting with the theme. In order to try and rectify these problems I filmed a large chunk of it again, capturing more shot types and angles. I also completely reworked the opening titles. Then as it came to editing, as I had more footage to use, I had a lot more freedom to experiment with different editing techniques.
Below I have embedded my second draft:
Christina Low's AS Media Studies 
Feedback from AS Group,
Main Task Marking Criteria (Thriller Opening Sequence)
Evidence in the work of the creative use of any relevant technical skills such as:
• holding a shot steady, where appropriate; (minimal, basic,, proificient, excellent) BASIC – Unsure of when it is supposed to be shaky for example, during the bush sequence with the P.O.V. shot .
• framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate; (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) EXCELLENT -Liked the shot of the woman opening the door, it built suspense
• using a variety of shot distances as appropriate; (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) EXCELLENT – Good variety of shots eg. when hand is opening the door, more close-ups for the antagonist
• shooting material appropriate to the task set; (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) EXCELLENT – Liked setting
• selecting mise-en-scène including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting; (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) EXCELLENT – Street lamps were effective for lighting eg. one could see the facial expressions and gave an eerie atmosphere
• editing so that meaning is apparent to the viewer; (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) PROFICIENT – Pace needs to be increased eg. to increase the climax
• using varied shot transitions and other effects selectively and appropriately for the task set; (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) PROFICIENT – Scroll effect wasn’t effective as it didn’t fit in ie. could be used with the book of photos, could be seen as a ‘cartoony’ technique
• using sound with images and editing appropriately for the task set; (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) PROFICIENT – Sound was a tad jumpy between flashes of camera and music, should consider layering sound so music can continue underneath sound of flashes, the target sound effect worked well at end
• using titles appropriately. (minimal, basic, proficient, excellent) PROFICIENT – Font and colour, framing was good – suited the genre but needed more titles, could place production titles at beginning – establishes atmosphere of genre
48/60